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Evaluation

Evaluation

My presentation was about a Mockumentary my group are making called “The Only Way Is Bermondsey.” I took the role of scribe in our group. The section I planned and prepared for was the treatment and the recce. This meant I had to present our ideas, to the class, about what our Mockumentary was about and where we were going to be filming it. When I presented my bit to the class, I used a range of skills such as eye contact, hand gestures, and clear language. During the presentation I felt a bit nervous, however, I was fully prepared and therefore knew what I was doing.  People said I was good at speaking clearly, using eye contact and having confidence. I was most proud of my clear and projected voice as it made sure people knew what I was talking about. I was also pleased with my eye contact as I am not very good at it but I colour coded my script so then I knew when I had to look up and I would know where to start again. To improve in the future I would look up more often and for longer. I didn’t use body language very effectively and I think this was because I was holding my script and therefore it was restricting me from moving very well. Therefore, in the future I will try to remember it so I can use body language and more hand gestures. People said that to improve I should use tone of voice and include body language to interact with the audience more. Therefore, in the future, I will memorise my script which means that I could use hand gestures more effectively and body language.

Xhesi Abdurahmani (HAB)

Well done! You are a merit because you have said what skills you used and how you could improve, and what you did to persuade your audience to watch your Mockumentary.

To improve for a distinction you can explain what role you took in your Mockumentary and how you delivered your presentation. (Y)

proposal

Company Name:  Mosby Production

Contact Details: HAB Southwark Park Road, Bermondsey SE16 3TZ

Title of show: The Only Way is Bermondsey

Type of show: Mockumentary

Purpose of show: The purpose of our show is to entertain the audience, mock the documentary format and make fun of teenagers. Teens think their life is dramatic and interesting but chances are they are a little overdramatic and maybe too exaggerated.

Synopsis: The show follows the ups and downs of teenage life in Bermondsey. We will follow the turbulent life of teenagers in a typical Bermondsey school; we follow the characters Freya, Jessica and Emily who are the normal ‘nerdy’ called kids. Then the chavy girl characters called Bobbi, Amie and Chesney. The chavy boy names are Reiss, Liam and Aiden. Come and join us as we follow the groups adventures around Bermondsey; schools days, nights out, parental arguments and friendship disputes abound The Mockumentary will show the comparisons of all the different types of characters. There’s never a dull day in the typical Bermondsey School.

Target audience: teenagers and students People who are the same age as those who are characters in the show.

 

 

Katie King

Xhesi Abdurahmani

Molly Puckey

Lucy Gauron

 

writing a recce

Questionnaire results

 

act 1 1st draft

Act 1 Scene 1:

INT. BOBBIS HOUSE. MORNING.

BOBBI, a 15 year old girl which blonde straight, orange make up and mascara sticking her eyelashes together. She wakes up to the sound BOBBI wakes up to the sound of her alarm clock. This is her first day of school. BOBBI is getting dressed for school. She hears a knock on the door. The door swings open and BOBBIs foster dad burst through.

BILL (Foster dad):

You still not up yet? Get up quick and ermmmm keep your              pie hole shut! (He shouts aggressively)

BOBBI:

Yes, sorry.

 

BILL slams the door vigorously

BOBBI slowly gets dressed slowly. BOBBI goes over to the mirror and start to redo her make-up, applying it on heavily. She swings her Pauls Boutique bag over her shoulder and head out the door.

 

 

ACT 1 SCENE 2:

INT. SCIENCE DEPARTMENT. DAY

MR COOPER, the head of year, calls a head girl AMIE with blonde curly hair flowing over her shoulders. AMIEs face, like BOBBIs was also heavily made up with orange foundation and thick mascara. AMIE walks over confidently to BOBBI and smiles at her.

                            MR COOPER:

Good Morning BOBBI and welcome to Bermondsey Academy. This is our head girl Amie and she will be in all your classes. First of all she will show you around the school and tell you what we expect from you while you are here. I must dash but im more than sure that AMIE will make you feel comfortable.

MR COOPER walks away rigidly whil AMIE and BOBBI are left alone

AMIE:

Hey, how you liking the school so far?

BOBBI:

Its alright (she says shyly)

AMIE:

Well im sure you can hang out with me. Im not really bovvered to show you round much but ill show you the toilets and our lessons and the lunch hall okay?

BOBBI:

Ermmmm okay….(she replies comfortably)

AMIE:

Well come on then….

ACT 1 SCENE 3:

AMIE and BOBBI open the doors leading to the lunch hall and walk in. AMIE and BOBBI get a separate table just for them self’s and sit down. BOBBI starts eating the sandwich she made in the morning, tuna dripping from the sides. All of a sudden she puts down her sandwich and starts rubbing her belly. Unaware of what she doing.

AMIE:

Are you alright?

BOBBI realeases what she was doing and stops immediatetly.

BOBBI:

Yeah, im alright

AMIE:

Haha you were starting to worry me there, I thought you were pregnant or something, lol! (She starts to laugh to herself)

BOBBI remains silent

AMIE:

Wait a sec, are you pregnant?

BOBBI nods slowly and looks down at her food. She picks up her sandwich and starts to nibble on it.

AMIE:

Oh… well I promise that I wont tell a soul!

BOBBI:

Thanks (she whispers quietly)