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act 1 1st draft

Act 1 Scene 1:

INT. BOBBIS HOUSE. MORNING.

BOBBI, a 15 year old girl which blonde straight, orange make up and mascara sticking her eyelashes together. She wakes up to the sound BOBBI wakes up to the sound of her alarm clock. This is her first day of school. BOBBI is getting dressed for school. She hears a knock on the door. The door swings open and BOBBIs foster dad burst through.

BILL (Foster dad):

You still not up yet? Get up quick and ermmmm keep your              pie hole shut! (He shouts aggressively)

BOBBI:

Yes, sorry.

 

BILL slams the door vigorously

BOBBI slowly gets dressed slowly. BOBBI goes over to the mirror and start to redo her make-up, applying it on heavily. She swings her Pauls Boutique bag over her shoulder and head out the door.

 

 

ACT 1 SCENE 2:

INT. SCIENCE DEPARTMENT. DAY

MR COOPER, the head of year, calls a head girl AMIE with blonde curly hair flowing over her shoulders. AMIEs face, like BOBBIs was also heavily made up with orange foundation and thick mascara. AMIE walks over confidently to BOBBI and smiles at her.

                            MR COOPER:

Good Morning BOBBI and welcome to Bermondsey Academy. This is our head girl Amie and she will be in all your classes. First of all she will show you around the school and tell you what we expect from you while you are here. I must dash but im more than sure that AMIE will make you feel comfortable.

MR COOPER walks away rigidly whil AMIE and BOBBI are left alone

AMIE:

Hey, how you liking the school so far?

BOBBI:

Its alright (she says shyly)

AMIE:

Well im sure you can hang out with me. Im not really bovvered to show you round much but ill show you the toilets and our lessons and the lunch hall okay?

BOBBI:

Ermmmm okay….(she replies comfortably)

AMIE:

Well come on then….

ACT 1 SCENE 3:

AMIE and BOBBI open the doors leading to the lunch hall and walk in. AMIE and BOBBI get a separate table just for them self’s and sit down. BOBBI starts eating the sandwich she made in the morning, tuna dripping from the sides. All of a sudden she puts down her sandwich and starts rubbing her belly. Unaware of what she doing.

AMIE:

Are you alright?

BOBBI realeases what she was doing and stops immediatetly.

BOBBI:

Yeah, im alright

AMIE:

Haha you were starting to worry me there, I thought you were pregnant or something, lol! (She starts to laugh to herself)

BOBBI remains silent

AMIE:

Wait a sec, are you pregnant?

BOBBI nods slowly and looks down at her food. She picks up her sandwich and starts to nibble on it.

AMIE:

Oh… well I promise that I wont tell a soul!

BOBBI:

Thanks (she whispers quietly)

Final treatment

Act 1:

Bobbi wakes up to the sound of her alarm clock. It’s her first day at Bermondsey Academy. She misses her friends at her old school, Peckham Academy. She’s dreading it more than anything. What if people notice? What if people find out? What if they judge her? She remembers every detail of that night and will never forget it. It pains her having to cope with it all alone but she is not giving up, she will push through….

Bobbi is new to Bermondsey Academy. Mr Cooper, in the Science department, gets a student called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Bobbi is shy at first but gets to know Amie so they bond really well and decide to have lunch together in the school lunch Hall. While eating her tuna sandwich, she feels the baby kicking. Bobbi starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing. Amie makes a joke about Bobbi’s stomach but Bobbi doesn’t laugh.  Amie realises that this is serious and realises that Bobbi is pregnant. Amie promises to keep this a secret. However, Jay overhears this and tells his girlfriend Kelly. Kelly is going to start stirring things up. Bobbi’s secret is now revealed to the whole Academy.

Act 2:

Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside, in the playground, on a bench talking about what they did over the summer holidays. Suddenly, Kelly makes rude comments to Bobbi about her being fat and this gets Bobbi really mad and angry. Bobbi walks over and raises her hand to slap Kelly but Kelly stops Bobbis hand and pushes Bobbi and she stumbles and drops to the ground. Bobbi lays on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help Bobbi up but she can’t as she grunts in pain. Amie calls Ms Phalange to call an ambulance as blood trickles from under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her baby. She starts to panic but Amie holds her hands comforting her. Dr Bing says some comforting words to her but she starts to worry as more and more blood comes runs down her skirt. Bobbi is lying in the hospital bed when Dr Bing comes in and tells her that she has lost her baby. She starts to sob silently to herself. Amie comes in and hears the news and comforts Bobbi by staying by her side. Amie questions Bobbi about the father but Bobbi remains silent as tears are running down her face. She wonders if she can trust Amie with her big secret and she starts telling Amie her story….

Treatment draft 2

Act 1:

Bobbi wakes up to the sound of her alarm clock. It’s her first day at this new school. She misses her friends at her old school Peckham Academy. She’s dreading it more than anything. What if people notice? What if people find out? What if they judge her? She remembers every detail of that night and will never forget it. It pains her having to cope with it all alone but she is not giving up, she will push through….

Bobbi is new to Bermondsey Academy. Mr Cooper, in the Science department, gets a student called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Bobbi is shy at first but gets to know Amie so they bond really well and decide to have lunch together in the school lunch hall While eating her tuna sandwich, she feels the baby kicking. Bobbi starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing, Amie makes a joke about Bobbi’s stomach but Bobbi doesn’t laugh.  Amie realises that this is serious and that she really is pregnant and Amie promises to keep this a secret. However Jay overhears this and tells his girlfriend Kelly that goes to the same class as Bobbi. Kelly is going to start stirring things up. Bobbi’s secret is now revealed to the whole Academy.

Act 2:

Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside, in the playground, on a bench talking about what they did over the summer holidays. Suddenly, Kelly makes rude comments to Bobbi about her being fat and this gets Bobbi really mad and angry. Bobbi walks over and raises her hand to slap Kelly but Kelly stops Bobbis hand and pushes Bobbi and she stumbles and drops to the ground. Bobbi lays on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help Bobbi up but she can’t as she grunts in pain. Amie calls Ms Phalange to call an ambulance as blood trickles from under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her baby. She starts to panic but Amie holds her hands comforting her. Dr Bing says some comforting words to her but she starts to worry as more and more blood comes runs down her skirt. Bobbi is lying in the hospital bed when Dr Bing comes in and tells her that she has lost her baby. She starts to sob silently to herself. Amie comes in and hears the news and comforts Bobbi by staying by her side. Amie questions Bobbi about the father but Bobbi remains silent as tears are running down her face. She wonders if she can trust Amie with her big secret and she starts telling Amie her story….

 

Treatment draft 1

Act 1:

It’s the first day of school and Bobbi is new to Bermondsey academy. A teacher gets a girl called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Amie and Bobbi bond really well and decide to have lunch together in the school lunch hall when all of the sudden she starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing, when Amie makes a joke about Bobbis stomach but Bobbi doesn’t laugh and Amie realises that she really is pregnant and she promises to keep this a secret. However a boy that goes to the school over hears this and tells his girlfriend Kelly that goes to the same class as Bobbi and she going to stir things up.

Act 2:

Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside in the playground on a bench talking about their summer when all of a sudden  Kelly makes rude comments about her being  fat and this gets Bobbi really mad and angry and Bobbi walks over and raises her arm to slap Kelly but Kelly stops Bobbis hand and pushes her to the ground. Bobbi lays on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help her up but she can’t as she grunts in pain. Amie calls Ms Robinson to call an ambulance as blood trickles from under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her baby. Bobbi is lying in the hospital bed when Dr Richardson comes in and tells her that she has lost the baby. She starts to sob silently to herself. Amie comes in and hears the news and comforts her by staying by her side. Amie questions Bobbi about the father but Bobbi remains silent as tears are running down her face.

 

 

Xhesi Abdurahmani

The device I am going to be discussing is shot types and variety. We see this in the Mockumentary “Summer heights high.” There is a section when the students show the students show the camera crew around the school. In this section a long shot is used the get a wider shot of their surroundings. However, later on mid shots are being used to focus on the main character in the Mockumentary and where they hang out. This makes the audience feel more involved with them.  In the Documentary called “Bruce Parry Tribe” lots of different shot types are used. One of them is a long shot so we can see the surrounding that there are in and it makes us feel really interested in the atmosphere and the bees’ habitat. However, they also use close ups to really get the detail of the animals in this case the bees. This makes us feel excitement as we are now in their world and its feels very real.

The next device I am going to be analysing is Quality of Filming. In the Mockumentary the quality of filming is not very professional as the camera is always moving about so it gives the impression that its is real as it looks like he had to take it on camera straight away as though it happened live when actually they have rehearsed this thousands of times before but needed to give the impression of it being a real documentary. This makes us feel that the Mockumentary is really actually a documentary because they are taking it “on the spot”.  However in the “Tribe” documentary the camera moves but in a professional way so the footage doesn’t turn out blurry but because they have more professional equipment they have lots of cameras but it just moves from one to the other which is why it looks so professional whereas in the “summer heights high” it only has one camera and takes everything and moves everywhere. This makes us feel more focused as they are not confusing us with the moving of the camera like the Mockumentary.

The third device I am going to be looking into is Quality of footage. In the Mockumentary the footage has poor quality. This is because documentaries used to have poor quality whereas now they have HD quality. The Mockumentary tries to take the mick with this and is therefore using poor quality to give the impression that it is a documentary when infact it is not. The audience feels irritated by this as they are taking the mick and therefore not taking this seriously. However, in the documentary they use High definition quality so really good quality and this is to get every single detail of the animals and the habitat they live in. Also with such good quality it seem realistic which makes us feel like we are there with him.

The fourth device I am going to discuss is Narative vs Interview. In the Mockumentary you can hear children in the school screaming, laughing and overall just talking. In the interview they to us in slang and informal language which therefore makes us feel like we are being welcomed into their group as they are talking comfortably with us and talking to us like they would do with one of their friends. This makes us feel comfortable as they have welcomed us. We cant hear the interviewer because there is no interviewer. This is because its like we have become the interviewer and they are talking to us because if they had an interviewer it wouldn’t make us feel as involved because there would be an interviewer in the way. However, in the documentary we can hear the nature and bees in the background which gives the whole effect of it being realistic. When Bruce Parry talks we hear lots of pauses and fillers such as “erm…” This proves that this isn’t rehearsed and is in fact shot at the moment. This makes us feel that involved as at the precise moment because it’s not rehearsed we see him and facial expressions at the moment and what he feels like where as if they rehearsed we wouldn’t of seen his real actual feelings about the situation. We hear Parry’s voice as a narrator so then he’s explaining what was happening there and we hear his voice in the interview so it shows that he’s telling us at that precise moments how he feels.

The fifth device im going to be explaining is Observational shot. In “summer high heights” the observational shot that’s used is as though we are looking through a window and doesn’t seem like we are involved. This makes us feel that we are left out of the action. However, in the “tribe” the observational shot is looking into the action but looking over Bruce’s shoulder. This makes us feel protected by Bruce but not missing out the action.

The last device is the voice overs. In the Mockumentary there are no voice overs but the boys talking to us in slang. Only occasionally we hear the interviewer asking questions. This makes us feel not very pleased as it is informal but with the documentary the narrator uses sophisticated language which makes us feel that this is a professional documentary and reliable.