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Evaluation

Evaluation

My presentation was about a Mockumentary my group are making called “The Only Way Is Bermondsey.” I took the role of scribe in our group. The section I planned and prepared for was the treatment and the recce. This meant I had to present our ideas, to the class, about what our Mockumentary was about and where we were going to be filming it. When I presented my bit to the class, I used a range of skills such as eye contact, hand gestures, and clear language. During the presentation I felt a bit nervous, however, I was fully prepared and therefore knew what I was doing.  People said I was good at speaking clearly, using eye contact and having confidence. I was most proud of my clear and projected voice as it made sure people knew what I was talking about. I was also pleased with my eye contact as I am not very good at it but I colour coded my script so then I knew when I had to look up and I would know where to start again. To improve in the future I would look up more often and for longer. I didn’t use body language very effectively and I think this was because I was holding my script and therefore it was restricting me from moving very well. Therefore, in the future I will try to remember it so I can use body language and more hand gestures. People said that to improve I should use tone of voice and include body language to interact with the audience more. Therefore, in the future, I will memorise my script which means that I could use hand gestures more effectively and body language.

Xhesi Abdurahmani (HAB)

Well done! You are a merit because you have said what skills you used and how you could improve, and what you did to persuade your audience to watch your Mockumentary.

To improve for a distinction you can explain what role you took in your Mockumentary and how you delivered your presentation. (Y)

proposal

Company Name:  Mosby Production

Contact Details: HAB Southwark Park Road, Bermondsey SE16 3TZ

Title of show: The Only Way is Bermondsey

Type of show: Mockumentary

Purpose of show: The purpose of our show is to entertain the audience, mock the documentary format and make fun of teenagers. Teens think their life is dramatic and interesting but chances are they are a little overdramatic and maybe too exaggerated.

Synopsis: The show follows the ups and downs of teenage life in Bermondsey. We will follow the turbulent life of teenagers in a typical Bermondsey school; we follow the characters Freya, Jessica and Emily who are the normal ‘nerdy’ called kids. Then the chavy girl characters called Bobbi, Amie and Chesney. The chavy boy names are Reiss, Liam and Aiden. Come and join us as we follow the groups adventures around Bermondsey; schools days, nights out, parental arguments and friendship disputes abound The Mockumentary will show the comparisons of all the different types of characters. There’s never a dull day in the typical Bermondsey School.

Target audience: teenagers and students People who are the same age as those who are characters in the show.

 

 

Katie King

Xhesi Abdurahmani

Molly Puckey

Lucy Gauron

 

writing a recce

Questionnaire results

 

act 1 1st draft

Act 1 Scene 1:

INT. BOBBIS HOUSE. MORNING.

BOBBI, a 15 year old girl which blonde straight, orange make up and mascara sticking her eyelashes together. She wakes up to the sound BOBBI wakes up to the sound of her alarm clock. This is her first day of school. BOBBI is getting dressed for school. She hears a knock on the door. The door swings open and BOBBIs foster dad burst through.

BILL (Foster dad):

You still not up yet? Get up quick and ermmmm keep your              pie hole shut! (He shouts aggressively)

BOBBI:

Yes, sorry.

 

BILL slams the door vigorously

BOBBI slowly gets dressed slowly. BOBBI goes over to the mirror and start to redo her make-up, applying it on heavily. She swings her Pauls Boutique bag over her shoulder and head out the door.

 

 

ACT 1 SCENE 2:

INT. SCIENCE DEPARTMENT. DAY

MR COOPER, the head of year, calls a head girl AMIE with blonde curly hair flowing over her shoulders. AMIEs face, like BOBBIs was also heavily made up with orange foundation and thick mascara. AMIE walks over confidently to BOBBI and smiles at her.

                            MR COOPER:

Good Morning BOBBI and welcome to Bermondsey Academy. This is our head girl Amie and she will be in all your classes. First of all she will show you around the school and tell you what we expect from you while you are here. I must dash but im more than sure that AMIE will make you feel comfortable.

MR COOPER walks away rigidly whil AMIE and BOBBI are left alone

AMIE:

Hey, how you liking the school so far?

BOBBI:

Its alright (she says shyly)

AMIE:

Well im sure you can hang out with me. Im not really bovvered to show you round much but ill show you the toilets and our lessons and the lunch hall okay?

BOBBI:

Ermmmm okay….(she replies comfortably)

AMIE:

Well come on then….

ACT 1 SCENE 3:

AMIE and BOBBI open the doors leading to the lunch hall and walk in. AMIE and BOBBI get a separate table just for them self’s and sit down. BOBBI starts eating the sandwich she made in the morning, tuna dripping from the sides. All of a sudden she puts down her sandwich and starts rubbing her belly. Unaware of what she doing.

AMIE:

Are you alright?

BOBBI realeases what she was doing and stops immediatetly.

BOBBI:

Yeah, im alright

AMIE:

Haha you were starting to worry me there, I thought you were pregnant or something, lol! (She starts to laugh to herself)

BOBBI remains silent

AMIE:

Wait a sec, are you pregnant?

BOBBI nods slowly and looks down at her food. She picks up her sandwich and starts to nibble on it.

AMIE:

Oh… well I promise that I wont tell a soul!

BOBBI:

Thanks (she whispers quietly)

Final treatment

Act 1:

Bobbi wakes up to the sound of her alarm clock. It’s her first day at Bermondsey Academy. She misses her friends at her old school, Peckham Academy. She’s dreading it more than anything. What if people notice? What if people find out? What if they judge her? She remembers every detail of that night and will never forget it. It pains her having to cope with it all alone but she is not giving up, she will push through….

Bobbi is new to Bermondsey Academy. Mr Cooper, in the Science department, gets a student called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Bobbi is shy at first but gets to know Amie so they bond really well and decide to have lunch together in the school lunch Hall. While eating her tuna sandwich, she feels the baby kicking. Bobbi starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing. Amie makes a joke about Bobbi’s stomach but Bobbi doesn’t laugh.  Amie realises that this is serious and realises that Bobbi is pregnant. Amie promises to keep this a secret. However, Jay overhears this and tells his girlfriend Kelly. Kelly is going to start stirring things up. Bobbi’s secret is now revealed to the whole Academy.

Act 2:

Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside, in the playground, on a bench talking about what they did over the summer holidays. Suddenly, Kelly makes rude comments to Bobbi about her being fat and this gets Bobbi really mad and angry. Bobbi walks over and raises her hand to slap Kelly but Kelly stops Bobbis hand and pushes Bobbi and she stumbles and drops to the ground. Bobbi lays on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help Bobbi up but she can’t as she grunts in pain. Amie calls Ms Phalange to call an ambulance as blood trickles from under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her baby. She starts to panic but Amie holds her hands comforting her. Dr Bing says some comforting words to her but she starts to worry as more and more blood comes runs down her skirt. Bobbi is lying in the hospital bed when Dr Bing comes in and tells her that she has lost her baby. She starts to sob silently to herself. Amie comes in and hears the news and comforts Bobbi by staying by her side. Amie questions Bobbi about the father but Bobbi remains silent as tears are running down her face. She wonders if she can trust Amie with her big secret and she starts telling Amie her story….

Treatment draft 2

Act 1:

Bobbi wakes up to the sound of her alarm clock. It’s her first day at this new school. She misses her friends at her old school Peckham Academy. She’s dreading it more than anything. What if people notice? What if people find out? What if they judge her? She remembers every detail of that night and will never forget it. It pains her having to cope with it all alone but she is not giving up, she will push through….

Bobbi is new to Bermondsey Academy. Mr Cooper, in the Science department, gets a student called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Bobbi is shy at first but gets to know Amie so they bond really well and decide to have lunch together in the school lunch hall While eating her tuna sandwich, she feels the baby kicking. Bobbi starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing, Amie makes a joke about Bobbi’s stomach but Bobbi doesn’t laugh.  Amie realises that this is serious and that she really is pregnant and Amie promises to keep this a secret. However Jay overhears this and tells his girlfriend Kelly that goes to the same class as Bobbi. Kelly is going to start stirring things up. Bobbi’s secret is now revealed to the whole Academy.

Act 2:

Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside, in the playground, on a bench talking about what they did over the summer holidays. Suddenly, Kelly makes rude comments to Bobbi about her being fat and this gets Bobbi really mad and angry. Bobbi walks over and raises her hand to slap Kelly but Kelly stops Bobbis hand and pushes Bobbi and she stumbles and drops to the ground. Bobbi lays on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help Bobbi up but she can’t as she grunts in pain. Amie calls Ms Phalange to call an ambulance as blood trickles from under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her baby. She starts to panic but Amie holds her hands comforting her. Dr Bing says some comforting words to her but she starts to worry as more and more blood comes runs down her skirt. Bobbi is lying in the hospital bed when Dr Bing comes in and tells her that she has lost her baby. She starts to sob silently to herself. Amie comes in and hears the news and comforts Bobbi by staying by her side. Amie questions Bobbi about the father but Bobbi remains silent as tears are running down her face. She wonders if she can trust Amie with her big secret and she starts telling Amie her story….

 

Treatment draft 1

Act 1:

It’s the first day of school and Bobbi is new to Bermondsey academy. A teacher gets a girl called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Amie and Bobbi bond really well and decide to have lunch together in the school lunch hall when all of the sudden she starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing, when Amie makes a joke about Bobbis stomach but Bobbi doesn’t laugh and Amie realises that she really is pregnant and she promises to keep this a secret. However a boy that goes to the school over hears this and tells his girlfriend Kelly that goes to the same class as Bobbi and she going to stir things up.

Act 2:

Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside in the playground on a bench talking about their summer when all of a sudden  Kelly makes rude comments about her being  fat and this gets Bobbi really mad and angry and Bobbi walks over and raises her arm to slap Kelly but Kelly stops Bobbis hand and pushes her to the ground. Bobbi lays on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help her up but she can’t as she grunts in pain. Amie calls Ms Robinson to call an ambulance as blood trickles from under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her baby. Bobbi is lying in the hospital bed when Dr Richardson comes in and tells her that she has lost the baby. She starts to sob silently to herself. Amie comes in and hears the news and comforts her by staying by her side. Amie questions Bobbi about the father but Bobbi remains silent as tears are running down her face.

 

 

Xhesi Abdurahmani

The device I am going to be discussing is shot types and variety. We see this in the Mockumentary “Summer heights high.” There is a section when the students show the students show the camera crew around the school. In this section a long shot is used the get a wider shot of their surroundings. However, later on mid shots are being used to focus on the main character in the Mockumentary and where they hang out. This makes the audience feel more involved with them.  In the Documentary called “Bruce Parry Tribe” lots of different shot types are used. One of them is a long shot so we can see the surrounding that there are in and it makes us feel really interested in the atmosphere and the bees’ habitat. However, they also use close ups to really get the detail of the animals in this case the bees. This makes us feel excitement as we are now in their world and its feels very real.

The next device I am going to be analysing is Quality of Filming. In the Mockumentary the quality of filming is not very professional as the camera is always moving about so it gives the impression that its is real as it looks like he had to take it on camera straight away as though it happened live when actually they have rehearsed this thousands of times before but needed to give the impression of it being a real documentary. This makes us feel that the Mockumentary is really actually a documentary because they are taking it “on the spot”.  However in the “Tribe” documentary the camera moves but in a professional way so the footage doesn’t turn out blurry but because they have more professional equipment they have lots of cameras but it just moves from one to the other which is why it looks so professional whereas in the “summer heights high” it only has one camera and takes everything and moves everywhere. This makes us feel more focused as they are not confusing us with the moving of the camera like the Mockumentary.

The third device I am going to be looking into is Quality of footage. In the Mockumentary the footage has poor quality. This is because documentaries used to have poor quality whereas now they have HD quality. The Mockumentary tries to take the mick with this and is therefore using poor quality to give the impression that it is a documentary when infact it is not. The audience feels irritated by this as they are taking the mick and therefore not taking this seriously. However, in the documentary they use High definition quality so really good quality and this is to get every single detail of the animals and the habitat they live in. Also with such good quality it seem realistic which makes us feel like we are there with him.

The fourth device I am going to discuss is Narative vs Interview. In the Mockumentary you can hear children in the school screaming, laughing and overall just talking. In the interview they to us in slang and informal language which therefore makes us feel like we are being welcomed into their group as they are talking comfortably with us and talking to us like they would do with one of their friends. This makes us feel comfortable as they have welcomed us. We cant hear the interviewer because there is no interviewer. This is because its like we have become the interviewer and they are talking to us because if they had an interviewer it wouldn’t make us feel as involved because there would be an interviewer in the way. However, in the documentary we can hear the nature and bees in the background which gives the whole effect of it being realistic. When Bruce Parry talks we hear lots of pauses and fillers such as “erm…” This proves that this isn’t rehearsed and is in fact shot at the moment. This makes us feel that involved as at the precise moment because it’s not rehearsed we see him and facial expressions at the moment and what he feels like where as if they rehearsed we wouldn’t of seen his real actual feelings about the situation. We hear Parry’s voice as a narrator so then he’s explaining what was happening there and we hear his voice in the interview so it shows that he’s telling us at that precise moments how he feels.

The fifth device im going to be explaining is Observational shot. In “summer high heights” the observational shot that’s used is as though we are looking through a window and doesn’t seem like we are involved. This makes us feel that we are left out of the action. However, in the “tribe” the observational shot is looking into the action but looking over Bruce’s shoulder. This makes us feel protected by Bruce but not missing out the action.

The last device is the voice overs. In the Mockumentary there are no voice overs but the boys talking to us in slang. Only occasionally we hear the interviewer asking questions. This makes us feel not very pleased as it is informal but with the documentary the narrator uses sophisticated language which makes us feel that this is a professional documentary and reliable.

 

moddboards games and music

The first one is a moodboard I done for gaming products. The second one is for pop music.

carrying a heavy object

 This shows us how to safely carry a heavy object.

audience profile

Audience profile for Sports questionnaire:

The audience for the survey we asked were between 10 and 14 years old. They are all female but that was maybe due to the fact that we only asked females. Most of the people rarely buy a magazine but some buy a magazine weekly. They rarely watch sports on tv and some never watch sports on tv. This shows us that the majority are not really into in sports or just don’t like watching it. The majority are interested in sports with 8 people. However, 6 people are not interested in it and again 6 people sometimes watch sports.  The majority haven’t really thought about whether they are interested in the Olympics.  5 people don’t really look forward to it and 4 people are looking forward to it and again 4 people are looking forward to only some aspects. So we can gather that our audience of 10-14 yr olds are not really into sports and they haven’t really thought about the Olympics.

I think my audience lifestyle group is Contented conformers. Contented conformers are people who like to act normal and sometimes follow the herd. They are comfortable in their own making. I think this is the lifestyle group that best suited for my audience because they only sometimes have the same answers as everyone else. Also  I think this because they are not really being interested in the Olympics that means they are comfortable in their own making and don’t really care.

This is my audience profile for the answers to my questions to survey monkey.

survey monkey

 These are my results for the survey monkey questionnaire on sports represented in a bar chart.

Survey Monkey Questionnaire

http://www.surveymonkey.com/s/5BL8S5H

I worked with Lauren Young due to the fact that I lost the document with my questionnaire on and I would not have completed this work if I had started again.

magazine sports excusive

horror video

I used Adobe Premiere to use this. This is a video. To make it I imported mini clips together to make this big video.





media production proposal

¬Media Production Proposal
Group names and contact details:
LXEE
Xhesi Abdurahmani
Lauren Young
Project title:
Merlin

Type of Tv programme
A weekly tv programme with a different storyline every week.
About 45 minutes long
Shown on CBBC channel and BBC one.

Purpose of Product:
To entertain our audience

Content:
Each week we will have regular features including
- The main characters
- The main theme tune at the beginning with main actors and actresses names
- At the end the credits
- At the end a short trailer of what is going to happen next time
- Magic included adventures

Target Audience:
Our Tv programme will be aimed at people from a young age for example 9 and up until maybe mid twenties but older people might like to watch it. But all ages will be suitable to watch. Both male and female can watch.
They are very creative people who love the world of make belief and fantasy. They are easily excited about this programme. There isn’t a particular uniform because people from all ages can watch it and both male and female.

My CBBC proposal

script taxi

ANNA walks to the edge of the road and waves her hand in the air for a taxi
A taxi comes by and stops in front of her
She steps in the taxi
ANNA
43 Westwood street please.
TAXI DRIVER drives on
ANNA talks on her phone
TAXI DRIVER whistles slowly
ANNA carries on talking on her phone
TAXI DRIVER stares in his mirror staring at her
ANNA looks at the mirror too
TAXI DRIVER looks away quickly
ANNA
Turn on the next right and then you can drop me off there.
TAXI DRIVER drives on and misses the turn
ANNA lowers her eyebrows
TAXI DRIVER raises his eyebrows
ANNA
Thats alright, I think you misheard me but I can still make it if you turn on your right...
TAXI DRIVER yet again misses the turn
ANNA
Its aright Ill just drop off here.
ANNA reaches to open the door
TAXI DRIVER quickly shuts the doors and ANNA is locked
TAXI DRIVER
I don’t think it’ll be alright for you
ANNA screams
ANNA
Get me out now!!
TAXI DRIVER drives on into the distance
ANNA quickly reaches her phone from her bag
TAXI DRIVER snatches it of her and throws it out of the window
ANNA
What are you doing?!
TAXI DRIVER ignores her and drives on
ANNA bashes the window with her bare hand but can’t break it
TAXI DRIVER smirks
ANNA
Please let me out! I won’t tell anyone just drop me of here!
TAXI DRIVER ignores her yet again
ANNA looks outside the window
ANNA screams
ANNA
Get me out!
TAXI DRIVER
Why should I?
ANNA
Why would you do this anyway?!
TAXI DRIVER
For fun!
TAXI DRIVER carries on in the distance and everything blacks out

script boyfriend cheating

EXT BUS STOP-NIGHT
EMILY sits at the bust stop
SHAUNA sits down next to her and turns her smile into a frown
EMILY she sees SHAUNAS face and notices something wrong
EMILY
Whats wrong?
SHAUNA
Nothing....
EMILY
Awww you can tell me!
SHAUNA
Well....
EMILY
Yes?
SHAUNA hesitates for a moment
SHAUNA
Well your boyfriends cheating on you...
EMILYS eyes open wide and then starts laughing
EMILY
Your kidding right?
SHAUNA
Nooo....
EMILY
How do you even know this anyways?
SHAUNA
Errmm....
EMILY breaths fastly
EMILY
Well how do you know then!
SHAUNA
Because the person hes with is.....
EMILY
TELL ME!!!!!!!!
SHAUNA
Well he tried to kiss me.... and obviously I pushed back and then he said that I shouldn’t worry because he has other girls to kiss anyway.....
EMILY shakes her head fastly
EMILY
Maybe you got the words mixed up! Yeah and really he said sorry and actually said don’t worry I won’t kiss any other girls!
SHAUNA
I don’t think he did....
EMILY sobs and tears roll down her face
SHAUNA hugs her and EMILY cries even harder
SHAUNA
Don’t worry your better than him anyway....
EMILY
Then why did he say that!
SHAUNA
Because hes a jerk! Dont worry you still have me....